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her tired eyes stared out the window
while i felt helpless and useless,
so i suggested we go to bed
but she insisted that she wasn't tired.

while i felt helpless and useless,
tears dripped down her face
but she insisted that she wasn't tired
and i saw the pain behind her words.

tears dripped down her face,
her sighs were heavy and deep,
and i saw the pain behind her words
for the first time since we got together.
Attempted a Pantoum

Don't know what it is? Look it up ;P

NaPoWriMo #4
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limarieinred Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely poem!   Good use of the style!
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bloody-magpies Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014
Why thank you!
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angeluchiha7 Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2014  Student Artist
nice poem :)
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bloody-magpies Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2014
thanks :)
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angeluchiha7 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2014  Student Artist
your welcome
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kerrybush Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
mmmm, lovely. :heart: adore your form poetry!
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bloody-magpies Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014
Thanks! :heart: I'm trying new forms this year hahaha
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